Mr. Everyone

HEY ZEIGE IM A NEWBIE TOO =), IF YOU HAVE ANY QUESTIONS FEEL FREE TO ASK A FELLOW NOOB AND WE CAN FIND THE ANSWER TOGETHER IF ONE OF US ...

Candmium, "silly sounding words" are to make the reader have thoughts of humor, and humor is most commonly assosiated with love, actually in many cases. and, the eyes are twinkling ...

"Couldn’t have been better, couldn’t have asked for more God has given me every thing by making you mine" First of all ",Couldn't have been better," and ",couldn't have asked ...

no point, it is just the view of sombody who is veiwing almost nothing at all it is sort of dull and full of nothing keep writing and =) happy ...

The poem is a bit dark... its got a good understandable theme, im not the type to critisize your format or anything, you could work on keeping your stanzas flowing ...

I don't much care what anyone says about it, bad grammar faulty writing... This is a good poem... Congradulations its an awe-inspiring literal piece of work keep writing =) happy ...

I liked the poem, yes it's over used, unoriginal, but it would have been original at one time keep writing and =) happy reading (=

It is a scene for a by-polar mind many times the mind is split into what most spychologists call moral and immoral and the first stanza represents the immoral the ...

Nice poem I enjoyed it, very descriptive as if like a stalker in detailed perception. Congradulations Keep writing and =) happy reading (=

I liked the poem, and understood it is a simple narrative perception of things that "shouldn't" be, that the narrator is simply looking over everything the world shouldnt have to ...

beutifull, and great use of conversational tone between characters Congradulations! keep writing and =) happy reading (=

I'm sorry, but im going to have to agree... This poem is only like all the other's barely a theme at all in any sort of existance, and its just ...

looks like you got all the critique from everyone else, so on a more positive note for a depressing story -gofigure- i liked the theme, though sad, it was an ...

don't take it to hard there are alot of overly drastic criticts that "drive to ruin peoples lifes work"-rosethorn keep writing and =) happy reading (=

Good expression of fealings. I like your poem, but in two instances you had 3 syllables on your 2 syllable long streak and it kind of through off the beat ...